Thursday, July 16, 2009

Be a Spy

"How could you do that?" Sadly, I had no answer to her inquiry, so I just said something, "I did what had to be done, Jackie, alright!" "Oh, so you just think you can go around hurting people and fix everything?" I knew breaking Jergen's arm was cheap of me, but he injured my best friend and deserved it. "I'm outta here Ben, you're on your own." Jackie uttered as she left my room and slammed the door. I was at a loss and simply stared as she got in her car and drove away. 

I called Carl to see how he was feeling after Jergen broke his leg in our basketball practice. "How ya doin' Carl, ya better?" He sounded down and out, "I'm alright man, just pissed that Jergen took that cheap shot at me," the anger in his voice rose, "what the hell was he doing man! He just took out my feet for no reason on a completely open lane!" I tried to calm him down, "I know man, I know,  but at least I got him back!" Carl didn't know about what I had done to Jergen yet, "Huh, what do you mean?" I giggled in reluctance, "I broke his arm later that practice by grabbing it when he was boxing me out, it was actually easier than I thought hah." Carl was silenced for what felt like an eternity, "Why would you do that, Ben, what the hell?" I could feel my mind beginning to pace, "I did it for you man, what are you talking about?" "That's awful, how could you do that?" Oh that damn line again, I have no answer for it still so I gave him the usual, "I did what had to be done, Carl, alright!" 

1 comment:

  1. Again, nice work here. I like how that single line of dialogue spans out into a believable story. A character takes shape--someone flawed and interesting. I would like to see you work on developing your dialogue by adding gestures (to show how the words are said) and indenting or spacing each time there is a new speaker.

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